Collect concrete sensory details
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Three original short poems exploring image, sound and line breaks, plus an annotated before/after revision and a plain-language commentary.
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What to include
- Write three complete original short poems with distinct image/sound/line emphases.
- Annotate actual words or breaks that implement each choice.
- Retain an unchanged draft and before/after revision.
- Provide selectable text and 100–150-word craft commentary.
Review and revise
Use these criteria to check your work and choose what to improve.
- Imagery: concrete details anchor the work.
- Sound/line: choices have specific supported purposes.
- Revision: form and content changes are distinguished.
- Presentation: original text and meaningful breaks are readable.
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The idea in everyday life
You can write from an invented place. Start with nouns, verbs and sensory facts; then decide which details deserve attention. “Beautiful” tells readers your judgment, while a particular sound or texture lets them build an image. Do not claim to know sensory information you did not observe: label invented details as part of fiction.
Specific details give a reader something to experience.
Collect concrete sensory details — worked practice
Specific details give a reader something to experience.
Original imagined bus shelter: a blue bench is chipped at one corner; rain clicks on its metal roof; a loose timetable lifts and settles. Detail bank: chipped paint (sight), cold seam (touch), roof clicks (sound), damp wool (smell). “Sad shelter” is an interpretation, not a sensory entry. A draft opens: “The timetable lifts / and falls without a bus.” The details begin to suggest waiting.
1. 1.1 Collect
Write a five-sense inventory for the supplied imagined shelter. Use “not chosen” for taste instead of inventing an irrelevant taste detail.
You should see: At least three sensory entries are concrete.
2. 1.2 Collect
Replace “nice place” and “bad weather” with two specific nouns and active verbs. Keep the details relevant to waiting.
You should see: Timetable, bench and rain replace broad labels.
3. 1.3 Collect
Select three details and arrange them into four to six lines without forcing rhyme. Read silently or aloud for what a reader can picture.
You should see: The short draft uses selected details rather than the entire list.
4. 1.4 Collect
Change the scene to a hot afternoon: replace rain/cold details with appropriate evidence and keep both versions.
You should see: The hot-afternoon version no longer describes cold rain.
What to finish
A sensory bank and two short place sketches.
Watch for this
Treating adjective intensity as specificity.
How can I tell I understand it?
You can show how a particular noun or verb changes the imagined scene.
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